Januz Miralles
Januz Miralles


Once I was proud of my long, graceful neck.

I wore necklaces of prisms and butterflies.

Once I was proud of my beautiful, flawless face.

Sultry eyes, perfect complexion, seductive mouth.

Once I was proud of my thick soft hair.

Hanging down my back, shimmering black.

I withstood the acid of your tongue.

I could not withstand the acid you flung. 

Inspired by mindlovemisery’s menagerie, photo challenge #34, “Wrap”; recommended by Prajakta


12 thoughts on “pride

  1. Pat November 16, 2014 / 8:42 pm

    Absolutely powerful – stunning ending – those two lines – Wallop!

    Even though a dark ending – still fantastic piece. :D


    • phylor November 17, 2014 / 10:23 am

      Thanks, Pat. I am tending towards dark endings these days.

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      • Pat November 17, 2014 / 6:47 pm

        Well, I do hope that your days aren’t making you feel down and out, as it were. Take great care of yourself :D


  2. Blake November 14, 2014 / 3:30 pm

    The last two lines are stunning – they literally stun you a little, with the climax appearing without warning like that. Really well crafted.


    • phylor November 17, 2014 / 10:26 am

      Thank you, Blake.
      The image had me thinking why would she be hiding behind lace and silk wraps.
      Unfortunately, acid attacks are not that uncommon.


  3. mindlovemisery November 13, 2014 / 4:18 am

    Oh wow this is powerful I recently watched a documentary on acid attacks, such extreme cruelty


    • phylor November 18, 2014 / 4:08 pm

      I know. That someone could do such a thing! Rarely talked about, but people need to be made aware of this inhumane practice!


  4. phylor November 12, 2014 / 11:15 pm

    I think I shy away from happy endings — out of character.
    When I looked at the picture, the first thought that came to mind was why would she wrap her neck, 1/2 her face, and her hair?
    The 2 lines wrote themselves, and I went with the flow.


    • phylor November 12, 2014 / 11:16 pm

      oops the upside down reply happened again!


  5. summerstommy2 November 12, 2014 / 11:09 pm

    Oh dear what was once good is now so grim. I had this feeling as I red it wasn’t going to end so well.


    • phylor November 29, 2014 / 4:20 am

      There is a kinda foreshadowing in the piece.


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