cloud player

 

Kylli Sparre 46
Artist: Kylli Sparre

 

shorn my head

of lies and intrigues

donned silken

vestments of the sky

waiting for the wind

to cleanse me

clouds to sweep

my sins away

Inspired by Mindlovemisery’s Menagerie Photo Challenge: Cumulus Fields

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  1. mj6969 February 9, 2015 / 11:01 pm

    Phylor, this post is wonderful – I really love the lines: donned silken / vestments of the sky

    For as few lines as this is, there are many layers to this – and it is powerful. :)

    Great look for the blog, by the way.

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    • phylor February 10, 2015 / 11:41 am

      Thanks for your kind comments. The lines just came into my head — I think it’s my subconscious that can write! ;-).
      The picture had many layers, and I think that inspired me to layer my piece.
      I needed a change so I’m trying this one out. There are 4 widget areas so I can go wild. No smart phone for apps so this is my version. ;-)

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      • mj6969 February 10, 2015 / 7:57 pm

        Well, have fun with it – as you wish – it’s relatively easy to play with the themes when we need to mix it up :)

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        • phylor February 11, 2015 / 12:58 am

          Sometimes I wish I felt I could shell out the extra bucks to get the premium stuff and customizing colours and fonts you have to pay for. But, content is still important, lol.

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          • mj6969 February 11, 2015 / 1:03 am

            Content far outweighs the bells and whistles.

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  2. summerstommy2 February 4, 2015 / 5:52 am

    This is very deep my friend, ‘clouds to sweep my sins away’. Did you intend to make the last line a smaller font size? It certainly drew attention to it.

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    • phylor February 4, 2015 / 2:01 pm

      Strangely, I did try to make it the same size as the rest of the text, but it won’t “grow.” Perhaps yet another sign.

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      • summerstommy2 February 4, 2015 / 5:05 pm

        Could be then again you could argue it enhances the visual and literary value of the poem. Then again not seeing you as a wanker in any shape or form you may well stick to your original explanation.

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        • phylor February 4, 2015 / 6:32 pm

          I like your first suggestion and it does draw attention to one of the key points of the poem (in my addled mind) — absolution.
          I think I know what a wanker is, but could you please translate?

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          • summerstommy2 February 4, 2015 / 6:35 pm

            Oh dear, not a word you Canadians know. I did have a blogger once tell me I use too many Australian colloquialisms. A wanker is basically a person who is up themselves and their own importance. I don’t see you in that light.

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            • phylor February 4, 2015 / 6:44 pm

              Thank you for not thinking I’m a wanker. While on colloquialisms — loved that you used gormless in your steamy sexual, sensual poem — I word I like but rarely see.
              I’m an addict of BBC in American, and other British imports. I’ve been watching Miss Fisher’s Mysteries supposed to be set in Australia (done by ABC) but most of the characters have an English accent. Supposed to be the 1920s — you folks weren’t colonials by then? But, I’m not a Downtown Abbey as we call it fan. Just too too.

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              • summerstommy2 February 4, 2015 / 6:56 pm

                I think Miss Fisher is a take off from the British crime stories of the 20’s. I haven’t watched it much but it has a wonderful Australian actress in the lead role. As for us being colonials it would depend on who you asked. There are some in Britain who think we should still be and we have a Prime Minister at the moment who I think wishes the Queen would come and live in Australia. He recently reinstated Knighthoods and bestowed one on Prince Phillip which has left us scratching our head as to why he would do that, after all Australian ‘Knighthoods’ as archaic as they are, and honours are for Australians. I haven’t watched any Downtown Abbey either. I watched a brillaint French series called No Limits recently, directed by Luc Besson.

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              • summerstommy2 February 4, 2015 / 6:57 pm

                Oh and gormless used to be a word a friend of mine used a lot, mainly in reference to her son.

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                • mj6969 February 9, 2015 / 10:55 pm

                  Oh dear, and I did forget to mention, it does have another meaning, as opposed to the one you suggested Michael, but since this is Phylor’s blog, I’ll leave it at that.

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            • mj6969 February 9, 2015 / 10:54 pm

              LOL – hey, this Canadian more than knows the word “wanker” !

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              • phylor February 10, 2015 / 11:42 am

                Come to think of it, but this blog is rated PG, lol.

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