snow blind: 50 word tale weaving fiction

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Storm-driven. Snow blind. Lost.

Wading through four-foot drifts. Face lacerated by ice-breath winds.

Pulls shawl tighter. Fingers and toes so numb.

Found her body after an early thaw. Curled in on her self, fetus-like.

Growing up between her frozen fingers, snow drops.

Some make it through the winter; some don’t.

I’ve been reading Linda G. Hill’s 50 word fiction on her  blog Inspiration in Progress. Thought for this edition of Tale Weaver 48, snow drops, I’d play with that genre. Fifty words after a couple of edits.

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18 thoughts on “snow blind: 50 word tale weaving fiction

    • taleweavering January 20, 2016 / 7:02 am

      Thanks for your helpful comment. I wondered if the form was too spare, but then I thought of being out in a storm, and the sentences worked — as you suggest. Thanks again.

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  1. Suzanne January 17, 2016 / 1:55 am

    Brrr – there is something of the Ice Queen about this post. It’s very effective.

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    • tale weaver/ing January 17, 2016 / 2:40 am

      Thanks, Suzanne.
      I’m glad I was able to invoke the Ice Queen for you! I was thinking of her power and potential cruelty.

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      • Suzanne January 17, 2016 / 5:51 am

        Goes to show what a clever writer you are. You lead to me to that conclusion without stating the obvious. How very clever of you. :)

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  2. mj6969 January 16, 2016 / 11:03 am

    sometimes stripping away and editing down can really be a very effective tool; great response here – you’ve done an excellent job with “50 words” – I enjoyed “Face lacerated by ice-breath winds.” — speaks of the shredding and fierceness of the weather :)

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    • tale weaver/ing January 17, 2016 / 2:38 am

      Thanks, Mj6969.
      I once thought writing 200 word, then 100 word pieces would be impossible — I bamble on so. Fifty words and micropoetry are my new playgrounds.
      We’ll see! Now, writing seems a struggle.

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      • mj6969 January 17, 2016 / 12:31 pm

        it’s funny how we are “limited” by our own thoughts … but I do understand … because once you strip it well and truly back … and decide to “go further” with something – it leaves – well me, at any rate – scratching my head in confusion ;)

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  3. Colline January 16, 2016 / 9:26 am

    Very effective Phylor. Well done.

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    • tale weaver/ing January 17, 2016 / 2:33 am

      Thank you.
      We are still waiting for snow. How about you? Much snow this winter?

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      • Colline January 17, 2016 / 10:18 am

        no. We had a few inches fall last week but none since then. We had rain yesterday so now we have ice :(

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        • taleweavering January 20, 2016 / 7:06 am

          Weekend of 22-24 January our first storm is forecast.
          Hope you got rid of the ice before any more snow fell. Ice is horrible!

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          • Colline January 20, 2016 / 8:10 am

            It is – I am always afraid of falling again.

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            • taleweavering January 20, 2016 / 11:25 pm

              Once you have fallen, it is so hard not to think it will happen again.
              Safe walking.

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