darkened waters

- Alessio Albi

Alessio Albi

An unedited free write based on Mindlovemisery’s Menagerie Photo Challenge 120

You look at me

caught in the ropes

I wove for you out

of stardust, tears,

lust and longing

Face yet unmarked

by worries wrinkles

Do your eyes plead for

a life line or a downward push?

I stare back

the mirror between us

but an illusion

you sit at my computer

I float just above the

darkened waters

 

©taleweavering/phylor 2016

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11 thoughts on “darkened waters

  1. Michael July 5, 2016 / 10:33 pm

    There’s a sense of longing and realisation of something just out of reach…..great response to the image…

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    • taleweavering July 6, 2016 / 10:29 am

      I was captured and captivated by the girl in the photo. She seemed to be looking directly at me, as if to change places. Strange feeling.

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  2. Shadeau July 5, 2016 / 7:57 pm

    Oh my goodness–so powerful, goes deep inside and won’t easily leave…

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    • taleweavering July 5, 2016 / 10:14 pm

      I was drawn in by the haunting look — I felt I was part of the photograph and she was watching me, waiting to see my response. It’s a photograph that will stay with me.

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      • Shadeau July 5, 2016 / 11:25 pm

        Indeed. I’ve just written a draft for it–it’s a very evocative image.

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        • taleweavering July 6, 2016 / 10:30 am

          I’ll have to drop by and read it. I’m curious what you made of her.

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          • Shadeau July 6, 2016 / 5:53 pm

            My vision is not great, so I saw a young lad–and away I went with my story… :)

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  3. jademwong July 5, 2016 / 2:58 pm

    I can’t quite put my finger on this poem. Slightly eerie, slightly melancholy, slightly reaching for something just between the lines. But 100% well written!

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