Jane Dougherty’s Poetry Challenge 49: When demons whisper . . .


Words to consider: Silence, raucous, pulse, haven, lethargic, silver; image: deep dream white noise; rhyme scheme abb acc add aee; 3 stanzas of 3 lines

For Jane Dougherty’s Poetry Challenge, 49 Painful Silence, I’ve written about the emotional pain my depression can cause. The demons of despair and hopelessness whisper loudest when I am vulnerable in a dark space/frame of mind. Their arguments can be seductive. I can silently listen and believe. Or fight.

 When demons whisper . . .

When demons whisper my name in the night

in throbbing waves of pain and tears

they remind me of my sins and fears.


When my darkness and trouble is at its height

they hiss my my many faults and flaws

words pierce like their sharpened claws.


When demons raucous laughter clouds my sight

I curl into a rocking, keening ball

I no longer care about life at all.


When demons in mind torture do delight

I need find my sword and shield

No ground to them should I yield.


When demons exposed to truth and light

they cannot keep strutting center stage

they creep to corners until next engage.

© taleweavering phylor






8 thoughts on “Jane Dougherty’s Poetry Challenge 49: When demons whisper . . .

  1. Jane Dougherty September 23, 2016 / 5:32 am

    Nicely dark :) I like that second stanza best, I think. No idea what the name of this form is, or if it exists. You did a good one though :)


    • taleweavering September 23, 2016 / 10:13 pm

      Why not the Jane rhyme or some such. You invented it — you get to name it.


      • Jane Dougherty September 24, 2016 / 8:14 am

        It’s probably already been invented. I just haven’t seen one before. I’ll call it rhyming triplets for the moment :)


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